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5/10 Are you? Prove it. -Kylan

Yes, Scotty, the length is fine. I scanned the first version of chapter one - the version that was twelve pages long - and decided I'd get around to it ...

A question: when you recieve a critique from a younger member, do you dismiss it as immaterial because they're younger than you and obviously have less experience and/or can't possibly ...

You actually managed to pull of your rhyming quite well. I was impressed. For the most part, things flowed smoothly and coherently. However some of the wording was strange and ...

7/10 Scary. Looks kinda demonic... -Kylan

friends very carefully...

As Twit mentioned before, what the heck is an RPG dance? Is it */me softshoes with Kitty*? Because that would get very old, very quickly. -Kylan

Would it be possible to give us an english version as well? -Kylan

Synopsis: Booker Lee, a disillusioned member of the Black Dragon Tong (the Chinese-American version of the Mafia) based in Los Angeles and dealing heavily in the traffic of heroine, meth, ...

Well, here's a crit. Nice job. I'm looking forward to more. -Kylan

Does he star in action films (ie: Bourne Identity, The Rock, etc.) -Kylan

Cade is absolutely right. If you like it, get it out there. It has promise, but as I've said, needs something more. -Kylan

Okay. Game over. Finito. Though you did a good job writing this portion of the story - the story in general for that matter - I feel there are a ...

7/10 Cool idea, but chaotic sounding and reminds me slightly of "His Dark Materials". Short Story: (Sci-Fi) As the world finally falls into the hands of the neo-nazis - devout ...

Is he married? -Kylan