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I really like it a lot. Maybe put the first stanza last, so the descriptions build, and lead up to the realization that this is all about rain?

I really like how it freezes a specific moment, rather that making generalizations about some emotion. I feel like I really can connect to you though it. I also like ...

repeating "how could you? really places emphasis on it. It's really strong. I like the last stanza a lot. What if you put it first?

I like it, it really conveys the feeling. However, I'd like some concrete images, or especially similes/metaphors.

If I were you, I'd try rearranging the stanzas. At the moment you have it set up 1, 2, 3,... but I think 3, 2, 1 might sound really good. ...

I really really like this. Alot. The first stanza is stunning. I don't really like the second one, it seems a little repetitive, and I think it might be better ...

I like the simplicity, but describing spring as green and winter as snowy seems a little cleshe. I really do like it though. Maybe if you thought of a few ...

OhMiGod! I really really really liked this. I found the images great, and I found it so relatable and deep, on an unpretentious and real level. The only line which ...

There needs to be concrete imagery. Tangible sounds, images, feelings. It's good, but it feels too general without specific images.

. Carla Hitchens Carla listened contentedly to the snick of scissors, As pieces of blond hair fell to the salon floor like dead fish. Her new patent-leather shoes hurt. And ...

The one part that I really liked was "eyes closing to the soft sounds". I like it when people mix sensory images like that.

In poetry, I really like it when people are really specific. And while you might get a certain image for God, others, like me, don't. I'd like a line or ...

"My mind ran a marathon of thoughts" I like that A LOT But the slicing like razors seems a little cleshe I like the detail about the bead, and where ...

I really like the line breaks a lot. And the punctuation.That might sound dumb, but it made it flow so smoothly and easily... I didn't even notice. The second line ...