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It's a great story, though I wish it could've been a wee bit longer. :) It nice to read, though, and you did a great job.

Wow...Completely amazing. I loved it! It's flawless, and found myself wanting to kill the knights myself! A wonderful wonderful piece of work. I can't wait for chapter two!

Thankyou! I will fix those. And what did you mean by my ideas were used to death? All ideas originate off one another. You'll always find a little bit of ...

Thanks. I try to think what a teenager does, or what I would've done. :) I'm not a teenager. :P Thanks for the critique. :)

Thanks! All this will help with the novel i'm writing outside young writers society. One day, you might see it on the shelves. It's called "The Rider." no more deats, ...

Thanks! any more critiques?

Thankyou for all the critiques! The only thing is, i don't think i can make this chapter longer, only because the following scene is in chapter two. I'll keep in ...

I love it! The battle sequence was my favorite part of the chapter. I love the whole concept, though. I can't wait for more!

I love it. Can't wait to see more of your poems!

Thanks! i'm trying to figure out how do i make another chapter? i'm so horrible when it comes to technology.