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Re: Dying...revised.
I believe everyone can Have an opinion on the matter. I used to be idealistic and what's called a romantic But that was before. The opening was awkward, I agree, ...
Mar 31, 2005 -
Re: Missing you
At the moon in it's place I'd just like to point out that you used the wrong 'it's'. "it's" is used only for "it is", and "its" is used for ...
Mar 28, 2005 -
Re: Always Remember
Thanks. Like I said, I mainly wrote it for myself. I was missing my Dad a little (he passed away last year), so I decided to write some poetry.
Mar 28, 2005 -
Re: Always Remember
Always keep your memories, Of the good times, and the bad. But most of all think happy thoughts, About the good times we have had. Remember the way I used ...
Mar 26, 2005 -
Re: Gateways
I really liked this poem. Just a few little things - (sorry, I'm a perfectionist!) - A couple of the similes are already used a lot. Don't get me wrong, ...
Mar 25, 2005 -
Re: too long
Nice poem! :) Just a few things I think could be improved.. Too long (Capital L?) Too long have we been controlled by the eyes in the sky (This line ...
Mar 23, 2005 -
Re: Country Town (for English)
Because I couldn't think of anything else to write....lol. I don't even live in a country town. :) And it looks longer when it's written out by hand...I tricked myself.
Mar 21, 2005 -
Re: I Hate You Mum
Everyone else stole my points! *mutters under her breath*
Mar 21, 2005 -
Re: for grant (i.e. prom date)
Not my favourite poem, but that's more to do with my taste than your writing. This poem reads too much like a story - it's a very conversational poem. There's ...
Mar 21, 2005 -
Re: Country Town (for English)
This poem was written for English...I got 17/20 for it. I'm not sure I like it, but I thought I'd post it anyway and see what you all thought. Country ...
Mar 21, 2005 -
Re: Plea
Well done - this is a really good poem! Normally I'm not a real fan of non-rhyming poetry, but this poem is different. I loved the ending - it sort ...
Mar 21, 2005 -
Re: Hourglass
I love the descriptions in this...especially your use of similes and adjectives. One thing I'd like to point out, though, is that you started of in past tense, then switched ...
Mar 21, 2005 -
Re: Running Away (better titles?)
I think I sort of did that on purpose...I hinted at it, but didn't want to just tell the reader what had happened...thanks for the feedback!
Mar 20, 2005 -
Re: Change One Letter
hole
Mar 20, 2005 -
Re: Running Away (better titles?)
I ran. I didn't know where I was going to go or what I was going to do there, but my feet just kept on pounding steadily against the wet ...
Mar 20, 2005
