KnightlyAngel09

9/10. Because the 2nd one was witty but the first one is from Chekhov and I haven't read anything by Chekhov lately. That's fair, ain't it?

Kris, definitely. He reminds me of Lifehouse and John Mayer. I adore his voice and when he sang 'Falling Slowly' I fell in love. I think Adam is good but ...

Hiya bf.:D Cool that you ended the way you began.:) Rhyming is great, rather like a song though. The rhythm isn't consistent all throughout but I think it works. Except ...

Short and lovely. Word usage is beautiful. Rhythm falters in the fourth line. One syllable too much. Anyway, overall, really pretty. Punctuation has to be fixed though and there's a ...

Brilliant once again. I see you loved those lines as well and so do the others.:) "Into the arid..." You're quite epic, honestly. The wording is beautiful. This is almost ...

What an absolutley powerful and wonderful poem. It's quite amazing how triumph and hope just simmers in your words. Excellent word choices, it has made this poem very vivid. Great ...

The old site I was on gave no criticism whatsoever so I typed young writers on google and it popped up.:)

[quote="Banango Cheesecake"] I believe that instead of killing said individuals outright, we should use them to test experimental medicines. This way, they will benefit mankind. And they will sort of ...

Hello bf.:) Ui, pretty poem. Aw, you write such great poetry. haha. random. Uhm... Woah, I can't believe you did the syllables thing. It's really hard to do. Bravo.:) Oh, ...

Haha. Thanks coco.:) I'm happy to be a girl though. See ya in our future school.

Absolutely amazing. I can't fault it. Lovely words, excellent structure and excellent rhyming. Imagery all there. Emotions depicted in the most vivid but simple and besutiful way. Quite fascinating ho

It's a great concept to write about. THe utter simplicity of this poem gets the message across quite effectively. However, I think the 3rd to the last stanza of this ...

Absolutely lovely. I loved your beginning. Quite a play on Shakespeare. Great rhythm, beautiful word usage. All your words are so vivid. They're captivating. All in all, amazing. Keep writing. ...

Hello. I just wanted to tell you that I enjoy your writing. This story has quite swept me away. I find it quite lovely how you can keep the voice ...

Thanks to those who reviewed. This is a different for me I hardly write free verse and I'm rather apprehensive about it. Anyone else care to help with this piece?