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Re: Neither docile nor timid thou art
Neither docile nor timid thou art. Yet with your veritable tenacity you prevail upon my consciousness; an insistence in webbed corners and those always clean. Oh, Thief of all Thieves! ...
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Re: .....
Chapter One With only one more year of high school remaining, an Early Acceptance from Columbia University and a timetable for when I’d be able to make my great escape ...
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Re: Fixed At Zero [Chapter 6 - Draft]
“Chloe, get down here, now!” Mom cries from the stairwell, less than an hour after our heated words. It’s strange though, because it usually takes her two or more hours ...
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Re: David and Dante Chapter 3: Fighting With Demons
There's the usual grammar/nit picky mistakes that can totally be found if you reread. Now,for some character relationships. Please, correct if I get anything wrong. David and Dante are brothers, ...
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Re: Flawless-4
(A/N-For anyone who is following, I changed her name from Hanna to Emily) 4 I prefer being left alone, in times like this. I am, too. Caroline ditched dinner. I ...
Aug 17, 2010 -
Re: BloodLust - Prologue & Chapter 1 Part 1 [Edited]
Hey Kit, Thanks for the critique, I really appreciate it *grins*. (The use of the word sentinels makes me think of Wolverine and the X-men.) Wolverine and X-men huh? Hmmm, ...
Aug 17, 2010 -
Re: Hey, It's Just Me
Welcome! I'm kit. Don't worry. I've ben writing since my seventh grade-and ever since
Aug 17, 2010 -
Re: Read This Or Else - Mwahaha!
Hey, Kat! (Has just learned this forum exists. Interesting.) I sing too! and I only, seriously wish I'm Filipina. I'm sort of jealous ~Kit
Aug 17, 2010 -
Re: Chapter One part one and two
If you were to walk into fourteen year-old Stephanie Sheppard’s room, you wouldn’t notice anything different. You would still see her blue walls and white carpet, her bed with the ...
Aug 17, 2010 -
Re: wrong choices
This piece feels empty. It needs emotion. How would you feel if anyone called you those names? Keep that in mind if you expand on this. And tell me if ...
Aug 17, 2010 -
Re: BloodLust - Prologue & Chapter 1 Part 1 [Edited]
BloodLust Prologue The stars were all that glistened in the sheet of darkness that prevailed above the wildlife surrounding the man. He made his way through the forest, disturbed by ...
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Re: Ticking Heart, Beating Clock
Sweet sadist, the alarm clock that beats inside my heart Ticks away the minutes until we meet once more No sleeping pill, no shield of eyes would hold my slumber ...
Aug 17, 2010 -
Re: What Happens As You Watch A Man Die?
That was very strong, although short. You make up for the length by jam packing so many thoughts and emotions into those few paragraphs. Keep writing ~Kit
Aug 17, 2010 -
Re: The Dark Prison
Dear Lucy, My heart aches whenever I think about you. I know I will see you soon, but it just seems so far away. It isn’t so bad over here, ...
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Re: Crimson Lullaby Chapter One
Chapter One You are the only Exception The Lesson was going well. Well I'm sure the teacher thought it was going well, no one was loud, nothing was thrown and ...
Aug 16, 2010
