KitxKat

Hey. I'm KitxKat, or Kat, as Im trying to make myself known, and I shall be your reviewer. Icefire - part one Queen Saron, ruler of the land Fiamal, watched ...

It was a great party. Really, it was great. It was supposed to be one of the best nights of my life. I was just letting loose, trying to forget ...

Alright, I have a few points ~Orginze into paragraphs. It gets to be headache-making. Anything else I have put in purple. In the crystal castle of the King of Camelot, ...

That was very interesting. There were few grammar errors I noticed. PM me when you get the first chapter up If you do. I would love to read it!

Prolouge I’m traveling in a meadow. It seems surreal. I decide it isn’t real. I know I’m dreaming. “Rage. Rage. Rage.” The word is pounding with every step I take, ...

Hey! I'm KitxKat, or Kit, and I'm gonna review your work. Anything I our in purple is a grammar error. Anything blue is anthing else On top of a cliff ...

I Have Rewritten EVERYTHING! So, comment and enjoy! Kit. ****************** 1 I hurt. I hurt all over. I’ve been beaten up, electrocuted and slapped all period. I force myself back ...

Yes, it is me again. Grammar is purple anything else is blue. Charlotte ran down the stairs. Her favorite dinner was on the table. Spaghetti with meatballs, in her opinion ...

Hey! I'm KitxKat, or Kat, and I'm here to review your work. Anything in purple will be grammatical, and anything else will be in blue. So, It's good. It's getting ...

Hey! I'm KitxKat, or Kit, and I'm here to review your work. I like this piece. You show talent and promise. BREAK THE CHAINS 1 I first met my future ...

Hey! I'm KitxKat, or Kit, and I'm here to review your work. I find this piece interesting. Anything tips and such I shall put in purple Nullus Spero snapped his ...

Hey! I'm KitxKat, or Kit, and I'm here to review your work. In purple! A few tips~ 1. Remember Capitalizations! 2. Use commas instead of semi-colons before speech. 3. Start ...

Yes, quite cheesy. But I find that benefits it. Lightens the mood a bit.

Interesting. As I've said a ton, already~Use the senses. You're already pretty good at that, and your piece has the right amount of emotion. Good job.

It was interesting. 'Justin's yanked her arm' i think should be 'Justin yanked her arm. I'd say, slow down a little bit more. Use the senses. Become the character.