Kit

corresponding I am the curl of phrase the breath in the wire. A bandaid; If I am good, you will forget me, and the wound you bid me bind.

There's a little of Kipling and Dahl in your tone, elements of Hemingway and Tolkien. A lot of visual rhyme and forced rhymes, but hey, Tolkien did that some times, ...

They don't know what's so fun about shooting an empty can of beans with a rifle--is it the way the can jumps into the air on a successful hit, the ...

I think there is much to be said about small spoken work. Lyrical, it moves soft across the palate. Sombre, subverting the bucolic agrarian imagery of the field with the ...

The Heroine Addict Little Betty Noir was not upset. Most heroines, she knew, were orphans. Disposing of her parents was hardly problematic. (Foot note: Bête noire is the French phrase ...

the romantic he was unaware that when she said till death do us part she meant la petite mort (Foot note: la petite mort, [for those who aren't Clau] translates ...

I disagree entirely with Muffin and Misty's honorable opinions, in fact, that's quite contrary, saying it's pretentious and infantile. That's one of the thing that disappoints me with this site, ...

There are some very strong lines in here that work well dramatically. The lipstick and the flowers are evocative, I'd be interested to see the staging of this, I think ...

You have some interesting ideas in here, I hope you explore the new metaphors you have here, I really like "insipid knuckles". Not a fan of the ivory, it's overused ...

Wait a minute.. wait a minute.. YOU being ATTENTIVE to description? Now that's just dirty, wicked. Music bled from the floor-to-ceiling speakers And you use VERBS to create your imagery, ...

Hey Clau, I've already spoken with you about this lump crap but I still wanted to say have my babies. Hi Sam. I don't mean to be avant garde most ...

In terms of first person, I was thinking a little of Sylvia Plath, like in "the Mirror" or Robert Frost's "A Peck of Gold". Kind of a balance between a ...

Needs a lot of work, I know. Feel free to shred. PG 13 for violence. Shards [nix] "We're going to drown." He says, "Take my hand. Up, we need to ...

Oh come on, you guys don't know Hellen of Troy? And since when has classical allusions made a poem invalid, back in the day that's all the poetry people wrote. ...

Good. Read the short story "Conversations with the Unicorns" by Peter Carey. That is all.