Kit

Your dilemma reminds me of a legend about one of my favourite composers, he wrote a piece called La Lascivae, and then realised maybe referring to lasciviousness was iffy considering ...

Jesse James was never a fool, He could handle a gun like a thread on a spool. A gun crazed criminal the story is told, A pistol a hat, is ...

In an empty, dark room I sit by the wall, huddled into a corner with a million shards Of my broken dreams scattered everywhere, Destroyed forever, By mere Conventions.......... I ...

I need to get into more of your works to get a feel for your style, so probably everything I say will be entirely irrelevant. I want to see William ...

First, I'm not sure what the last two instruments are. I believe that you mean viola and saxophone. If they are, you spelled them wrong and the viola is not ...

I appreciate that you have Robert Frost in your signature, because this means that you know that Frost was, by and large, a stoic. I like that you combine the ...

Often times when you write something raw you're unable to step back and analyse it technically. It becomes a lot harder to submit it for critique, because when someone says ...

I must vehemently disagree with VousEsEtonnant. Do not footnote polysyllabic word unless it is technical language. James Joyce wrote deliberately incomprehensible prose and expected people to dedicate

Trumpter Rory Foxton, MBE, pulls on his mottled ugg-boots with a grunt, he didn't let them dry from last night, see, the stitching's rotted right through at the front. He ...

I think you need to think about pacing, how the words flow with the relation to your subject matter. You could take it in different directions, kind of make it ...

Wait. Wait, wait wait. Debussy wrote something OTHER than "Claire de Lune"? Why I'm mortified. Does Edward Cullen know about this? I kid, I kid. I'm practising his "Danses sacrée ...

As you have an Alice in Wonderland thing in your profile, I'll put it like this. If you call a poem 'Jabberwocky', you back up your literary allusions and add ...

This is very earnest and honest. I like that it isn't heavy handed, you don't have extraneous words, you know, but oddly enough I would like to see it as ...

Bah. Okay. No. Look. This wants to be a sonnet so badly it is painful, because you gave up part way through. Sonnets are nothing to be ashamed of, structure, ...

I like the fragmented stream of consciousness thing, but I think that it is somehow too confined in itself. Your opening images are striking, it's a very visual piece, actually ...