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Re: The Beginning Story.
Uhm, okay. I apologize for offending you in any way.
Jul 14, 2011 -
Re: The Beginning Story.
Hello! I write my corrections and suggestions in bold. I’m not sure when it happened really, I was walking home from school it was public you know those kind of ...
Jul 13, 2011 -
Re: Hunted (*Extended Version*)
Hello there! I write my corrections and suggestions in bold. I pumped my legs, running as I had never run before. Sweat poured off my brow, and occasionally clouded my ...
Jul 13, 2011 -
Re: Resisting Rhys
Hello there! I write my corrections in bold 1 Rhys “Shh, it’s okay, baby,” I cooed as I petted her hair. The girl in front of me was practically trembling ...
Jul 13, 2011 -
Re: Are you writing a novel?
Well of course I am. Am I ever not? ;) It's one of the reasons I haven't been on this site for months. I always like to finish the story ...
Jul 13, 2011 -
Re: Still Doll Prologue - We Are Artwork
Prologue We Are Artwork... When I was a kid, I used to think of my life as a portrait or a ballad. If it were a portrait, you’d see a ...
Jun 13, 2011 -
Re: Dog waser in S.A running away from bear
Hello! I write my corrections in Bold. A dog washer in South Africa running away from a bear There was once a dog washer in South Africa named Linda Liz. ...
Jun 13, 2011 -
Re: Palm Tree
This story is about a palm tree. If you don't like that you can stop reading. (I put a break here because that's where the story starts. We begin our ...
May 24, 2011 -
Re: Romeo & Juliet: Instant Messaging Edition
I loved every moment of this! I laughed so hard I'm still tearing :D I adored this part though: Mercutio1594: OMG BENVOLIO HELP ME!11!!1!111!!1!!!! Benvolio: Mercutio? No longer ignoring me, ...
May 20, 2011 -
Re: Fake
My corrections are in bold :) She doesn't want to pretend anymore . I feel it would add more emphasis if you added periods here. No one really knows who ...
May 15, 2011 -
Re: My Sugar Plum Fairy
Her melodic laughter fills the field with sparks of purple glitter, the light so clear you fail to see accurately. Her eyes so green, glistening like dewdrops after fallen rain; ...
May 15, 2011 -
Re: Alright, so I'm ne here....
Welcome to YWS! On this site, you can submit your writing pieces or join discussions. People can review your work for you, if you want. Most of the reviews here ...
May 3, 2011 -
Re: My Soul To Keep - Chapter 1
The warm sunlight from my window touched my cheek, awakening my eyes. The first thing I saw was my ceiling, then my camera beside me on my nightstand, and then ...
May 3, 2011 -
Re: Seperated
My corrections are in purple: "Hurry up! We're going to be late!" Hailey shouted from ahead. "Sorry Hai-Hai , but I have to tie my roller skate." I said quickly. ...
May 3, 2011 -
Re: Bluejay Painting
Wow. Either way, it's still beautiful It took my breath away :D It kind of makes me want to be a painter, but I can't even paint a straight line
Apr 30, 2011