Kinsley

Quote: Elizabeth nods her head understandingly and I can hear her guilty thoughts about bringing the subject up with Adam. ‘Could’ instead of ‘can’ or add ‘almost’ before ‘can’. Yea, ...

Becuase of editing and more changes to the story I had a need to update this. Well, it's finally updated.

Yea. They're just a band of warriors that are feared throught the country that go on rampages. They usually kill just for fun. :(

(Not sure if this is in charachter for Baer, the whole soft spot for Miya, if you don't like it black_wings I will take it out. You said he could ...

A rabbit. He was using a rabbit as a cover for murder. Elysia spun around, Miya on her hip. She pushed back her blond curls with her delicate fingers and ...

Addie When Adam gets home he’s in a sour mood. He slams the front door and stomps down the stairs to his room. Apparently he doesn’t want to talk about ...

Elysia gasped and ran from her hiding position in the trees. She couldn't find Baer so she left her sister by the campsite to go look for him. Well, she'd ...

Yes, that was my assignment. I was supposed to take a fairy tale and change it around so that the good guy was the bad guy (ie: How Cindy Lou ...

Oh, and by the way, you can have my personal opinion. These are the changes that I would make. It's just a suggestion so don't go and get mad at ...

First of all, welcome to YWS, Futurestar! I hope you have fun here and you learn to become a better writer. Remeber to give others honest and helpful critiques. Later, ...

Yea, that wasn't much of a critique. But I'm not the authority on this. Um, I guess I liked your poem *hesitant laugh*. But I don't get what happened in ...

Whoa

Wow, it looks like people have given you a lot of critiques. Well, overall I really liked the story and can't wait for the next installment. Hope it comes out ...

Oh don't worry. I know this poem is pretty bad right now. This is the first draft. I'll probably need about ten more :P. All I wanted to do was ...

Lilyan jumped down from her position in the trees to land on her haunches in front of the two. Her sword swings gently at her side. "Need some help?" she ...