KingKamor

Once again, Myth, thank you for tearing this chapter to shreds. =3

Chapter 3: Traction Craig: It had been so long since Craig had seen the sun. So long, in fact, that he'd forgotten the color of sunlight. There were so few ...

The Zombie Survival guide! :o My friend has that, and I read it. Sure, it's for comedy, but it makes complete sense at the same time! XD

Haha! i'ts GIR! XD 10/10

The image is a bit fuzzy and big, but that's the best my scanner can do at the moment...

Cool pic, but I can see in his tie and in his hair that you used a marker. That's quite a gamble. If you mess up, you have to either ...

I guess that I went a bit overboard with the punctuation, but I've seen it done in several books, so I thought that it was okay. I'll make a [s]few[/s] ...

Chapter 2: Amelia Regenen "'Who the hell am I?'" the girl echoed at Craig. "I just got this room for my boyfriend and me! How dare you walk in here!" ...

Thanks for the compliments, BrokenSword. I was worried that this wouldn't get off the ground, but I think it will now. I'll post the second chapter in a bit.

Well, I've had the idea in my head for this story for awhile... but I got a three-month long writers block after the first page and a half @_@. Anyway, ...

Pretty good. You could do with a bit more description, like what the characters look like, and thegeneral scene everything takes place. There were also a few grammatical errors, but ...

I like the narration-- it sounds exactly like what a high school girl would put in her diary... Now I feel guilty for reading Autumn's diary... Anyway, pretty good so ...

Oooohh! *gazes at them for a bit* I've always liked ice. All of the pics are very beautiful. But, like others said, the stairs were kind of annoying. XD

I like the dress she's wearing in the first one. The wrinkles in the clothing are subtle, yet effective, and the colors are well done. The only thing that I ...

(Sheesh, lay off the caffine, people. :? ) The beginning didn't really grab me, and it was difficult to read, since you put breaks between almost every sentence in the ...