Khepri

The major thing about this piece I noticed was the dialogue seems very forced. “Nothing,” I said “I was just remembering when we would come here in the summer with ...

stars quit the sky; wishes forsaken. What I meant by "quit the sky" was the stars left the sky, abandoning people's wishes. As in, "He quit the room" = "He ...

I cannot see the sun, for the sky has turned to black. The heavens rain the stars tonight, giving wishes back. I chanced to view this silent shower, as I ...

Heya! I liked this poem a lot! Some things, though... It seems sort of...unfinished. I think you should put in another verse at the beginning, maybe saying something about how ...

Where can you get inspiration? Anywhere!!!! A pencil on the street, a person sitting in the park, your fingernail polish, Just open your mind to everything around you, something will ...

Hey Erin, I changed this was terrible from start to finish. I am embarrassed I even posted it...please don't judge me on it :( so here is another poem, I ...

Love, love, love it. It's so hard to write pieces with a proper rhythm, but you have mastered it! There were a few typos, which I changed below... Among the ...

I deleted this poem!!! it is gone. and gooooooood riddance!

A few things... The young man traipsed down the street, Aviators covering his eyes and his dark brown hair spiked up as was the fashion in this day and age. ...

At first I thought he was a zombie or something (halloween is getting to me, I think) but you never explain why he is detaching himself from the world. He ...

year and a half. hey to you too.

So sad...I love this poem. It's sweet, but tragic. I have two things - one, "a lot" is two words. Second, and maybe this is just me being picky, but ...

Shine, when the light in the west fades to a deep black, and the darkness of night doesn't let you look back Dream, when the world eats up your colorful ...

I don't actually live in Egypt...but I wish I did! I live there in spirit, since I know so much about it :) My hedgehog is an African Pygmy, so ...

Hey.. I saw you have no comments on this, so I am commenting! I did one of these too...and no one is commenting. *sob*. Star Wars is awesome. I haven't ...