KevinL

I haven't read part 1 yet, so I can't say I totally understand what's going on but I really like what I'm reading so far. I found the characters dynamic ...

You seem to be very hard on your writing style. I thought it was very well done. Exceedingly well done I might say. You might try publishing it in Teenink ...

This is a nice little, I guess you'd call it, fable. It had a surprise ending and it certainly seemed to show you saying something about the traditional ideas of ...

It's a nice little monologue. It would be even nicer though if you beefed up with a plot and some background. This is something you should work on. You definitely ...

Very good. I could tell that this piece was meant to be quite philosophical and it certainly shows. Even though I'm not sure I got all that was being said ...

It was a very short prologue so I can't really say too much about how the story is. I think it would've been a little more interesting if you had ...

Don't take this the wrong way, but your story was a little bland. The good news is there wasn't anything terribly wrong with the grammar but they way you told ...

Interesting read. I don't know if I exactly "got it" but I definitely enjoyed it. I had to force myself to get past the first paragraph though. I think you ...