Keowyn

whoa. i'm speechless. seriously. ok, but i did find one or two things. scratch that, two. first off: He had reached the top of the tower, started as he opened ...

thanks you guys. Aha, but the scar plays a GREAT role in this. :twisted: and it sort of ties in with what happens later in the story. I did post ...

by all means it's fine, just as long as you DO rewrite it now. . .

I guess I'm a bit late, but in your first part this is what I saw: . Towards the southern end of the forest was a massive lake, the East ...

hey, thanks! I'll take the last one out, so, see ya!

Ok, this is bad. I've been writing for two years now, and have 3 files (not computer files) and 18 computer folders full of ideas. I want to keep them ...

Chapter One Kaerak pulled her tattered cloak tighter as the wind howled in the valley. With her she carried the dead corpse of a rabbit and a lean mahogany bow. ...

Is that two paragraphs??? This is really good, but it was hard to read because I didn't know who was talking about. I'm thinking you need to break this up. ...

oh, don't get me wrong! I love cats, but as an assignment in my Writing Class we had to write a poem about an animal, and I chose cat. And ...

ok, i'll remember that and quote that. :twisted: You start running and screaming now.

thanx for all that guys- i'll make sure to make sure the stanzas flow better in the future! ^_^

wow. this was completely awesome. It's full of potential, and like dynasty cow i got lost in this hopelessly. Keep it up. Oh yeah, at the end of chapter 2 ...

* This is a school assignment to let you know, and I just put it up for fun.* The trouble with cats, I'm afraid to say, is that most like ...

this was good, it flowed, but I think that one or two lines were sort of long. Keep it up though, this is great.

great. . . and after I've read it about a million times I'd have to say those words are annoying.