KenClark

This is the second thing I've posted here. I realize it's pretty short, but it's a start, and I wanted to see what you thought of it. Hoarse shouts of ...

The staccato pounding of the 50 cal. machine gun tore at the howling winds, the shrieking chopper blades, like ethereal monsters in a twilight battle, roaring their fury,. Dark, sneering ...

I liked it. I enjoyed the relationships shown already between the characters. I agree with the others that it needs some taste of a plot, but its a good beginning. ...

Very intriguing story. I liked all of the dialogue, and the imagery. Try not to let the characters ramble on too much, but it wasn't a big problem. The conversations ...

I liked this quite a bit, for an intro. I think you're detail was great, and the emotion was also well written. I agree with the others that its a ...

Interesting story. I liked the idea,and I'm curious to see where your taking it. One small thing i saw was your dialogue seems stiff. Like in your sentence: “I know ...

Wow. I loved it. There were a few minor errors, where your sentences were a bit wordy and didn't flow very well. I liked the idea of all of the ...

I enjoyed the story. The idea of the blue eyes piqued my curiosity, so I'm interested to see how it turns out. The few things I saw were some grammar ...

I'm Ken. I'm almost 17, and I've been writing on and off for a while now. I like to write all different genres, like romance, action, horror, and others. I ...