Kaylyn

Music bounced from wall to wall, its volume blaring over all competing sounds. Random, colourful lights shone and twirled in the darkness, whilst in the centre of the room drunk ...

OKay I am not going to go over and repeat what others have said about the critiques there were some mistakes but I really liked it. Keep up with the ...

Thanks for all the help, I edited it now so hopefully it looks better.

Oh, I'll be Phobe, I love her she is my favorite! Charmed is my FAVORITE show! I have been known to stay up all night watching a weeks worth of ...

Hi, my name's Kaylyn. My interests include reading(duh), writing(duh), cheerleading, drawing, playing sports like softball and volleyball, and scrapbooking. I started loving to read in 3rd grade, I st

Normally I don't read war stories but this was an exception, give yourself a pat on the back this is the first war story i have read. I am going ...

Thanks for your critiques, it really helps my books. My enjoy reading the writers feedback and it lets me know what people are looking for. I have edited it, and ...

Thanks for all the critique guys, it really improves my books. I have added up to chapter 5 so far and I hope you read it and enjoy it.

It is looking even better. Though I think you should take out the last sentance, it just doesn't sound right. I didn't find any grammar mistakes this time. You did ...

Okay, I really like what you have so far but there were a few mistakes, so I will go line by line. “Riley stop worrying,” exclaimed Sam. “How can I ...

Okay there was a few grammar mistakes, but they have already been mentioned so I won't repeat. I really, really like the story and it leaves me wondering whats next. ...

Thanks for the critique it was really helpful. I just edited it.

Three years ago I wouldn’t have believed you if you had told me I was going to be a cheerleader. I was a hard-core softball player; and had played for ...

I really like what you have so far. There are a few mistakes so I will just go line by line. I am the ghost within the walls; I have ...

Sorry and yes I know this entry is a bit short. My brother is wanting to get on so again. I will post another chapter as soon as I get ...