Kaylyn

This sounds very original, I like it so far. A magical bed? Cool. Anyways describe this place a little more. You might even want to explain and put in more ...

Okay your story is original, I like it so far, but it has a few mistakes. First of all pick a tense. Another is the fact that you keep rotating ...

Okay.... that was a bit of a weird short story. Very... Unusual. It sounds pretty good. I can honestly say I have never read anything like it. I would recommend ...

Okay you intruduce the characters way too fast. You provide no details... I don't mean to be rude but it is boring. Spice it up some. Also you need to ...

If you haven't read the previous installments, you probably should go back and read them, they are not long. For those of you that have been keeping up, I hope ...

Yeah, I am working on it. *sigh* This is a really rough draft, I know it is way to fast... I just needed a quick ending. I was bored with ...

Thanks for that critique, I have now edited it. Hope you like the improved version.

Yes, I know I don't actually think these as chapters but as parts. The first few parts are one chapter, of course. I know, I know, I am working in ...

Thanks for the help, it had now been re-edited.

His temper got the best of him, again. He bared fangs and hair sprouted through his skin. It wasn’t that painful if he didn’t think about it. Ever since he ...

Thanks for all the help, its now been re-edited. I hope you like the new version. -kaylyn

I really need some critique. Please help me out. thanks.

I have been playing around with this idea and I really need some input and critiques. Thanks. ..........................................................................................................

I really like the plot, very original. I will not point out the grammar mistakes because everyone else has already done so. It got a bit confusing with all the ...

Okay to make the flashbacks less confusing to the reader, you should put them in italics. Makes it ALOT easier on the reader. I didn't spot any grammar mistakes, but ...