Kaylyn

Okay I don't really understand this story. But maybe thats just me... I don't watch dragonball Z. I watched one episode. This isn't your best poece of work. I think ...

I really like this story.PLEASE,PLEASE,PLEASE,CONTINUE IT. I hate cliffhangers they're so cruel. Now for the critique. ----------------------------------------------------------------- The urge came b

I really like your book its very original, and very interesting. But there are a few mistakes so I'll do a line by line critique. Rhys pounded down the wharf, ...

Okay, yeah I know I've critiqued it already. I found something else. Well I really didn't understand this part. “The mark that you have on your hand is the mark ...

Very descriptive. Is this one the first part of the book? I really liked it, everyone has already pointed out your mistakes. But I have to say USE QUOTATION MARKS!!! ...

*breaks into applause* Very original I really liked it. You did have a typo along the way: “Don’t forget to see your father,” Sethmumbled after me. “He said he had ...

Okay I like the story...but its a bit too fast. I think it needs more description too. You make the battle seem like its no big deal. Put some more ...

“How happy you are, wretched mortal…” Nice way to start it out... Hands were holding him at the ground as he was struggling of pain. He let out a scream ...

*applaudes loudly* Very good it draws my attention in fron the start. It keeps me interested and wondering whats next, and leaves me full of questions wanting to devour the ...

Okay, okay it isn't that bad. It isn't like Eragon.(I love Eragon by the way.) *glares at Lord Anzius* There's no connection to me... Anyways I really really like it ...

*breaks out into applause* Love what you've got so far. It was explained in such good detail... especially for you to be only 14 and a junior writer... I really ...

I like this length it short enjoy to read, but not so long your eyes go cross eyed from reading it. this story seems very interesting... The flame spluttered and ...

Okay, caught some spelling mistakes, but I'll fix them right up. Please don't take it the wrong way. I am just suggesting the following improvements. I like the story so ...

If you look closely it says seems an unquenchable thirst . Thanks though, I really try to make my books understandable, so yeah... Thanks again for taking the time to ...

I am working on three right now. Half-Blood (my pride and joy! my fav.), Alexandrite, and Puppy Love.