Kaylyn

I don't care what ya'll think but I loved the whole book. I LOVED IT!!! The best book ever. I thought the pregnency think was great, I didn't see it ...

Oh see, that makes sense. I get it now... lalalala okay thanks for clearing that up, I was a bit confused about it too. *lightbulb clicks on*

I love what you've got so far, it a really good story. Very detailed and it grabs the readers attention. Normally i would give you a paragrapg by paragraph critique ...

Okay you took this way to fast, I could hardly keep up with parts. Please put a space after each period. It really bothers my eyes!!! Also you had a ...

I like what you have so far, make sure you put your flashbacks in italics. Makes it easier for the reader to comprehend. It has a lot of potential, and ...

Thanks, I edited it now. Please let me know if you find anything else, also let me have your opinion on what you think. Please, I really need feedback.

Really, hurry up and come out with the other part! I'm going to lose all of my fingernails before you come out with it. Yes, now your officially under pressure. ...

I love what you have so far. Was that it, or is there more to it? Your book definately has potential. Along the way though I only found one grammar ...

Oh so you've already finished this book... *Mumbles* I'll finish mine one day... So envious, how long is it going to be? Are you going to post it all? Yeah, ...

Oh yes, I orgot to mention that you should probably break down your paragraphs and put a space between each one. It makes it easier on the reader's eyes... good ...

Capitilize your I's. I noticed that that were a few of them in lower case. Anyways, let me know when you continue this, I would like to read it. Pm ...

He works at the station... what station? *feels growing dread* Hopefully its not a police station. I know it tempting but don't make it like twilight! I beg you. Okay ...

There was no sun just clouds. The temperature dropping rapidly. It was just how I expected Cold Bay, Alaska. That just had to be the place my dad lived, Eric ...

Yes, much better. You don't need to cut down on any more I's. I did catch a few mistakes that I overlooked though. I started crying , as I was ...

Okay I get it know thanks for clearing that up for me. Ohhhh....I get it now *lightbulb clicks on* You have to excuse me. Sometimes I am forgetting what I ...