Kaylyn

I think they are supposed to be omitted. Ewww... I hate Lord of the Flies. Such a gruesome book.

Break this up, if you don't want it critiqued then why'd ya post it? Put it in lines. Fix the grammar. Sorry I couldn't resist.

Okay intersesting beginning, it really drew me in. Goog job. Grammar, I didn't see any grammar mistakes, but then again, I don't look for those. Okay I think you can ...

Causes of the Civil War Essay In the years since the conclusion of the American Civil War, historians have advanced a number of causes of this great conflict. Some theories ...

Thanks so much for all the critique I have been given, it has tremendously halped my book. Hopefully this edition will be better.

Oh sorry, you must of edited it while I was typing in the critique.LOL

Great going, I didn't see any grammar mistakes, but that doesn't say much. I'm not very good at looking for grammar mistakes. Anyways loved it, please PM me when you ...

Okay, I would suggest that you shorten the paragraphs, just to make it easier for your readers. It also makes it easier to critique. Somtimes I'll get to reading and ...

Very good beginning. I love it. Please continue with it! Now on with the critique. I didn't see any major grammar mistakes, so good job in that area. [quote]His tawny ...

Really good, I liked it Jenny. It had a nice flow. You seem very talented at poetry, unlike me.:) Keep up the good work and keep writing.

Thanks, I am not very good at poetry, much better at writing stories. I guess though when emotions are a factor that I have just expirenced I do much better.

Thanks, that sounds better than mine. Hehe, I'll change it.

I did spell Queste wrong, but its on purpose. Thats for pointing out those mistakes. I really appriciate it. Thanks for your review!

Thanks, I'll get to editing it today or tomorrow. Chapyer Four had been posted by the way.

Sorry, I am trying to break myself out of the POV switching habit, I'll change it. Moira is just a name I got off the Internet, it sounded like a ...