Kaylyn

4/10 Not really my style... :)

its not the religion itself that causes problems, just the radicals.

Oh please Gadi... Actually thunder_dude7 Washingtomn disapproved of political parties, and wanted no part in them. He thought that parties would divide the nation and warned against them.

Gack! *ducks and runs* It just what matters to me. *huddles in a dark corner*

Welcome to YWS! I'm glad to see that another writer has joined. Its always fun to get to read and review others works. So just check out the Rules and ...

Galerius, all I can say is thanks. You were a part of my inspiration. But no its not all about you. My competitive nature kicked in. :) Thanks for all ...

Okay this is the second time I am doing this because my computer didn't post it the first time cause I lost connection. This is THE BEST story on here ...

This is a good beginning, you need to work on you punctuation though. Badly. For example you need to fix you dialogue. “Well, it looks like you were wrong Sarah.” ...

I can see your point of view.

Welcome to YWS! Just check out the Rules and you'll be fine. But if you have any questions feel free to PM me, or anyone really. So cant wait to ...

Well, at first it was. But then I wanted to make it a bit comedic.

You have again came up with a fantastic chapter. Your truey talented and I envy your talent. I wish that I could write as well as you. This chapter can't ...

Awesome revision. You have done a great job editing this story, it has come a long way since the original. It lost a lkittle of its comedy, but most of ...

Oh, okay I meant that you do a lot of showing instead of telling. Telling: She had shiny hair. She was wearing a yellow dress. She had a great personality. ...

This was most definately an info dump, but its a prologue after all. I like your descriptions. There is one thing that really irks me though. I don't know hy. ...