Kaylyn

Done! Lets have another.

I so did an indept review on the story, the computer ran too low on the battery and shut off. *screams* The bad thing is that this happens often. So ...

I so did an indept review on the story, the computer ran too low on the battery and shut off. *screams* The bad thing is that this happens often. So ...

I want to pet the chocobo *reaches hand out, but chocobo snaps at it* Here is the story:

Here's one. I tried something new there. Its short.

Bright, tawdry colors flashed past my uncaring eyes as carnival music filled my ears. Pictures of horses and green meadows whipped by; I didn't have the effort to stare at ...

Welcome there! Be sure to check out the Rules. An important one is please no chat talk, or horrible punctuation and grammar. Abide by these and no one bites. (Well, ...

Raiyne shrieked with surprise. These people were doing magic, she thought. Or maybe it was one of her crazy dreams. She skipped back as a boy threw a water ball ...

"Of course," Nyla asid solumly, "Independance comes as price." Paul nodded ahd turned to face the tent walls. She knew that it must be aot to take in, especially for ...

This is pretty good. I felt the same way in middle school. :) Okay, on to the review: You had a few spelling mistakes, but I am sure that you ...

My Life is a canvas Your Love is my paint Let your brush stroke me I'm open and blank Every time you say"I Love You" It's Paints a little More ...

I like the message...but it didn't flow that well. It didn't have that steady beat. Some of the stanzas were ackward. Maybe if you rephased some... I didn't see any ...

Nyla followed him, glancing from time to time at someone's face, hoping to find a familiar face. The trees were dancing wildly, casting shadows on her hands. Paul looked dazed ...

Congrats! It was a great essay!

Raiyne sprinted through the city. Whitewasher towers and high rises loomed over them, blocking the sky. The city had always frightened her with its sameness. Her child clung to her ...