KatTrain

she used to sing sometimes happy These lines are too simple. 'Happy' is overused. Try different vocabulary. and even flowers turned to listen and they grew big and tall the ...

I didn't enjoy it, doesn't really seem to accurately describe how someone would feel in such a horrible situation. There isn't a meaning, just a long string of random masochist ...

There wasn't much of a natural flow. Sometimes you smother the beauty of certain words by grouping them together in on massive description. "An ended fight, a gunshot lingering on ...

Ignore the person above me, she is a noob, to be quite honest, and doesn't know how we do things here on yws. Our aim, to remind everyone, is too ...