Karzkin

I must agree with Mangawolf, Dickinson and Eliot. My battered copy of Eliot's collected poems travels everywhere with me.

I gave you my heart. You gave me a gun, and just A single bullet.

This is brilliant, I loved it. The line I suffer only at your hand is just great, as are the last two lines. This is, however, a critique. So here ...

Thank you all for reading my humble offering, and for taking the time to critique it :) However, Alzora, I feel I must make few retorts: 1.I know what you ...

I really like this. A lilymoore said, your character is great, and I think the metaphor works rather well. I think there are a few ways you could improve this ...

I lost a lot of blood that night, I lost a lot of face. I lost my mind in the flood that night. I had no saving grace. If I ...