Karsten

I did read it but unfortunately it was posted after chapter two was already up so I couldn’t do anything about it in chapter two. Also I have some good ...

Hi Whisperer, Thanks for messaging me to clear this up. I obviously misinterpreted your previous comments - I felt like you were reacting defensively to my criticisms and accusing me ...

Best not to google Cthulhu. You never know what google hits might make your eyes explode, leaving you gibbering about tentacles for the rest of your life. :P

Hi Whisperer, When reviewers give you their time and effort for free in the hope of helping you improve, the appropriate response is "Thank you", regardless of whether you agree ...

I can't believe nobody is getting the Cthulhu references. (This was awesome, by the way.)

You have a very positive attitude, which does you great credit. :)

Glad I could help, Ronnok. :) Drive-by comment on the comment on my comments: Hello there, well personally, I've read Karstens comments and would like to add my own opinion ...

Loved "misfortunous". :P

Following up on your PM - this version is considerably less creepy. :D

Sometimes I stay away from Fantasy because a lot of the time there are just so many big names and sometimes not enough humanisation... So just for a minute, think ...

By having Marcus being mentioned and then referring to him as "the opponent who had already won", I was under the impression it would make it clear that the opponent ...

I agree with Karsten I never get tired of hearing those words. :wink:

Hi Bickazer, You asked about the description via PM, so description-specific comments. I did feel like there were some heavy chunks of description here. I started off liking it, but ...

Reading the second part now. This is really very good. The emotion is great. I especially like the way you play with grammar to good effect, for example stacking lots ...