KanenRenoir

Could you check out the redrafted version of my story? Here's a link to the first part of chapter one, but if you can, will you also check out the ...

I found this to be really interesting. I can't wait to see what happens next. The plot seems good, the title intriging. Please post some more soon. The visitor Cody ...

I changed the story to add in the edits. Thanks so much for the help. I decided to go with a crossbow and on a balcony.

I've redrafted my story and was wondering if you could check it out. Here's a link to the first part, but if you can, I was wondering if you'd also ...

Crit ticket if you want it. I'll get to this later on in the week. What I've read is really good.

“Halia, Are you in there? Come on might want to put a comma there. stay with me now!” I could hear the voice of my adopted brother faded in the ...

Nice. Interesting. I want more. You leave the reader with a very good cliffhanger. :D

I posted another part of chapter one of my fantasy novel, The Assassin's Redemption. I know I just asked you a few days ago, but I am in desperate need ...

Hey, I posted another part to chapter one of my novel, The Assassin's Redemption, and was wondering if you could check it out. The word count is 927. Thanks if ...

I lingered in the darkness tonight, I kept falling, I kept myself in the unknown. In the emptiness of my shut eyes I focus on my hands, they tingle, this ...

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I definitely think this is interesting. You have something here. I can't wait to read the rest.

Here as requested. I'll be doing a full review. If I omit a paragraph, then it means I couldn't find a problem with it.Corrections/advice will be in red. SOMEWHERE LOST ...

Here to review as requested.I've omitted the paragraphs that I thought were fine. Corrections/advice are in red. ]Mr. Taylor was a bigoted, ignorant sort of man who did not take ...

Let me point out that Lu'nac is not the bad guy. He's yet to be introduced. And this is only part of the first chapter. Thank you all for your ...