Kalliope

Hi, beware, it's me ... again. :D Wow, I really like this the way it is now. Very well written, the description is marvelous and the flow is amazing. Also ...

Hi, your welcome for the crit. You're doing an amazing job at taking the advice given and editing your work. You're so fast! I don't really have much time now, ...

Gee, thank you for that critique. I was just planning to get into this project again now that NaNo's done. Yes, there will be a few more parts, but I ...

[057.Leaf]: Gravity In the summer when he was a four-year-old boy, he had loved the sky. Every day his parents had taken him to the playground and as soon as ...

Hey iQuippie You know what I really can't believe? That you haven't been showered in praise for this by anyone yet! This is one of the most original and best ...

Haha, go hide, she's back! *evil laugh* Nah, I like the changes you've made so far. Some small suggestions/ comments: " I hate this . No matter what I do ...

Hokey-dokey, I've finished it! I actually liked it quite a lot. Most things I change or was picky about were precision in language and diction. Sometimes, because I was just ...

Thank you so much for the tips and compliments, everyone! Charliebo, jclifton - Actually the line break after glancing back had an intention, but I obviously didn't do a very ...

Gah, yet again it took me for ever to get back to this, but here I am, so don't hit me ;) Okay, first of all: Hi :D Now on ...

Aww, sorry for the double post, but I just finished the part about Sarah. This was absolutely wonderful. You'll find some of my nit-picks in the file, but I really ...

Here's your crit! Sorry it took me so long... Hope it helps you a little!

Haha, that explains a whole lot! Sorry, may just have been me being stupid, but maybe clearing it up would help incase someone else doesn't know. ;)

Thank you for the wonderfully helpful reviews everyone! I shall definetly redo the second part of the first stanza. You've given me sone real brainwaves, Heather (Thanks a ton!) and ...

Okay, here's the rest. :) Siren 2: Oh sister, dear , I don't sing for me. The third “sister dear” seems to be a bit much, so maybe replace that ...

Hey Heather, Siren 1: Dear sister - look at me - let me speak, on matters of the heart. I think you'll find I have some wisdom to impart. Siren ...