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with the chirping of rain on a rusted tin roof, I think the omission of "of" works better; more direct and gives the rain a character. In addition, moving "on" ...

Silented was pretty darn thorough. He doesn't leave me much to say. There is one thing though that he didn't address that I feel needs pointing out, and that is ...

Heya, Seph. I think this poem is just the perfect length. If anything, a bit of trimming is in order, in these lines in particular: with an elegant desperation a ...

Hello there, winjuri, and welcome to YWS. You might want to get around to reviewing other members' works; it's a great way to make friends and get more reviews on ...

I agree with Esther on the originality aspect. Don't be afraid to branch out and try new things; experimentation will lead you to things you might have never otherwise encountered. ...

First things first: that is one long author's note. I suggest you let the poem speak for itself. Rather than having the author's note in all it's impressive glory being ...

Hello there, Mika. First things first, I'm not sure if posting this was wise on your part, considering the circumstances you wrote it under. One of YWS's main purposes is ...

Hello there, nanah96, and welcome to YWS. You might want to get around to reviewing other writers' stories. It's a good way to make friends, and it will also help ...

I have but one burning question about this piece, and that burning question is "Why is the title misspelled?" There is no separation between your author's note and the start ...

That was ...interesting. The main issue that popped out at me was how you jumped around a lot in your ideas. For example, the *giggle* and the (clever people) and ...

Late. I know. Please forgive. Thread is called "(Un)timely Reviews" for a reason. --- The first thing I noticed in the first stanza was the inconsistent punctuation -- you sometimes ...

I'll admit I was a fair bit leery of this story when I saw it at the top of the Featured Works list. "Sci-fi on the Featured Works?" I thought. ...

“Cañónoscuridad ," a n ancient voice whispered. Lyle looked around him. He could see nothing but the intense darkness. “Cañónoscuridad… . ” the voice whispered again. It sent shivers runni

Rosalie knows what day it is. She smells it in the air and senses it all around her, from the fresh blanket of snow outside, to songs like Rudolph the ...

Look at me , Daddy. L ook what I did. Whenever you refer to someone directly, their name or form of address should be separated from the rest of the ...