KaitelynMiller

I wander in the night searching for a sense of light. A rhyme or reason for my internal treason. It all flows like ribbons and bows. But there’s a catch ...

This is super good. The end sentence is worded oddly though. That would have been that except something bigger was yet to come for Miss. April Reese. Maybe you need ...

Hey AngelBaby88, This is really good. Just a few grammatical errors and such. he smiled and nodded. Capitalize the "H" in he. If he hadnt turned in time he wouldnt ...

Hey irresistible kitties, Bitch. That's all that fucking teacher is, a bitch There should be a comma after the last bitch. Regardless of your age ,the kid in the book ...

They say that the past is a ghost, the future a dream, and all we ever have is now. My saying is backwards. The past is all I ever have, ...

This is really good. I generally click on stories with ratings because those are the writers that know their stories the best. I am glad I do that becasue your ...

Hey tnme22 This is really good. I think you should describe Jaymi better. I can't really picture her in my mind. Also talk about peoples facial expressions, thoughts, the way ...

All right, if you read this before you will remember what happened after. But since I like to keep my prolouges short sweet and to the point, I revised and ...

Hey Kyllorac, This poem is extremely interesting. The only problem I have is that you had to explain the psychology part at the beginning. It kind of ruins the depth ...

The Cherry Wood Forest surrounded me as I ran. My legs throbbed and my short breaths came less and less frequently. I looked for a place to stop and hide, ...

I actually really like this. It will appeal to many readers emotions. Everyone has felt used at one point in their lives. It will really let readers connect to your ...

This is a really amazing way to write a story about homosexuals. This topic is very controversial. Most people wouldn't dare write about this because of the fights and such ...

You have a two different types of Point of View's. First person and third person limited . You got to stick to one point of view or it will distract ...