KailaMarie

This was at a store, and i was trying on hats. lol. This was one of the few days where I don't straighten my hair. and sorry it's so big. ...

Thanks so much for all your comments and everything, guys! I really appreciate it and am happy you liked it so much. It's funny, because my friend told me a ...

Hi! Welcome to YWS. It's really a good site, and everyone really nice, but the critiques are usually really good too. There's a contest section, where you can enter things ...

I was looking for a new avatar, and I don't know where to look. Are there any good websites to find one that works with this site? I found a ...

This was good. I liked the message thing, I've been reading the entries from that contest. a couple things I found: To: From: Joanna Priest Subject: Jon Hey Perry. Have ...

-------------------------------------------------------------------------------- On a rainy night, an old man came knocking at the doors of a haunted castle. Three miles away a drop of water fell in t

The late summer sun filtered through the red checkered curtains as I played deli-meat-catch with my dog, Lucy. She was a skinny beagle. I thought she could use a little ...

I thought this was cute. I liked how they both just kind of wanted to escape. The only thing is, where do they know each other from? If you're going ...

I sort of understood, but I didn't understand the characters and their reactions. this just didn't seem very real to me. Like why is the girl so scared? and I ...

I loved your descriptions. And yes, it was a bit cliche, but what vampire stories aren't? And if you keep going, the characters will be different than the other ones ...

I agree with a lot of the things the people said above. Also, I would make this longer, like less of just an overview and more dialogue. Like maybe in ...

First of all, Welcome to YWS, because I noticed that you just signed up today!! That is so cool!!! You learned Swedish? I'd never heard of someone wanting to learn ...

Well here you don't have recess unless you're in elementary school, so that's why to me, that seemed very strangely young to be up to those kinds of shananagans. also, ...

Thanks so much for all the comments! this is the first scene this... descriptive I've written, so it was sort of experimental. all the things you guys have said make ...

At first I was confused too, but I went back and reread the part after the bold paragraph, because I realized it was probably the transition point, and I got ...