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Re: Handwriting
This is beautiful! I love it! The way it sounds, the imagery, the enjambment, and all the awesome stuff you did. brush awaystrangled curls and dry humorI turned the paper ...
Feb 21, 2011 -
Re: Purple World
It’s lovely when you put on a pair of glasses and the entire world changes. Purple tinted lenses over your eyes, and everything is brighter, happier. The world seems to ...
Feb 21, 2011 -
Re: Symptoms of Being a Teenager
I really liked this. It was interesting and really relatable and a different perspective, I think. I liked how it's in 2nd person, because it just made the connection easier. ...
Jan 23, 2011 -
Re: Becoming a Teenager
I’ve always hated the expression “Shit happens”. It just seems like a defeatist attitude. Yeah, bad stuff happens, but if you do the right thing, you can avoid a lot ...
Dec 31, 2010 -
Re: Telltale Tea
Ok, to clear it up, the girl was part of the couple, and she was so mad that night that she killed him. She was freaked out so she went ...
Oct 12, 2010 -
Re: Two Beeps, Two Dead
Hello! Ok, here we go! “If I leave now then the newspaper won’t be out on time. I am not going to let that happen, again.” I don't think you ...
Oct 11, 2010 -
Re: Telltale Tea
The couple who live above my apartment fight almost every night. Most of the time, they start up at about one o'clock, and keep at it for an hour or ...
Oct 11, 2010 -
Re: NaNoWriMo 2010 :D
This will be my third year. I'm so excited; November is my favorite month by far! :)
Aug 23, 2010 -
Re: point of view question(s)
I personally love when books switch characters because I love seeing things from different perspectives. I tend to think it works better when you do all of them from the ...
Jul 23, 2010 -
Re: Kissing scene tips, please?
I think it also matters if it's the person's first kiss. Because it can be different if the person knows what they're doing or not. But some basic tips: -if ...
Jul 23, 2010 -
Re: Music while you write?
I almost ALWAYS write with music. The only time I don't is if I put something on, and it ended, and I was so distracted that I forget to put ...
Jul 23, 2010 -
Re: Continue or Ditch?
I wrote a novel for NaNo last year, and I've taken a break from it, but I don't know if it's worth finishing. I have most of it done, and ...
Jul 23, 2010 -
Re: Beautiful Eyes :)
I feel like all colors are pretty, but the main reason eyes are so attractive to people is because they're all so expressive. Like how often do you take the ...
Jul 8, 2010 -
Re: The Creep
Hello! Welcome to YWS! Oonchee was going to be angry. He wasn’t one to complain—he let Nigel push him onto First Avenue without protest. These two sentences don't flow together ...
Jul 7, 2010 -
Re: Friends (rated for possible suggestion)
Hi! I', Kaila, and I will be reviewing for you today! :) We held hands through the good and bad. Pain joined us a little later. He, on the other ...
Jul 7, 2010
