Kafkaescence

What is death? Is it being born into a new life? To start over and over again once you've completed it full circle? Ugh. Too long. And "it" should be ...

I'm just going to base this extreme change in voice on the fact that between chapter one and two, many events have occurred that, apparently, changed the way she thinks ...

Interesting. So this chapter exists mainly for character development purposes, I presume? Huh. I liked it. So. There were no blaring spelling or grammatical errors, so I'll move onto my ...

Here I am. This won't be too long, I'm thinking. Nitpicks. As she chewed her bottom lip nervously, she never took her large, brown eyes off her wardrobe. Second time ...

She was the cracked ceramic tucked in the corners of This flows well. Or it would, without that "tucked" thrown in there. Say "ceramic tucked" out loud. Does it sound ...

I’m walking from this dream. "Walking from" sounds unfinished. I'd say "walking away from. It’s too painful to remember, Don't think you need this comma. It complicates things. Aim for ...

It's raining, So I'll stay inside, and write of the world external, Not a huge fan of the noticeable difference in size between those last two lines. Maybe if you ...

So, let me just say right off the bat that I haven't read any of the other review(s), so I apologize for any redundancies. Okay. I liked this. You've got ...

You sly people. >.< You post your stuff right before review day, and then just sit back and let the reviews pile up. Gah, I keep reminding myself to do ...

So. Here I am again. Since I haven't read chapter two yet, all this is going to be based solely on what I have read thus far, meaning this and ...

I have decided to review some poetry. be honest. You have doomed yourself, my friend. What would it be What would what be? if the Earth turned not? Interesting.... If ...

I like this piece. I like the repetition, I like the voice, I like the word choice. So, good job! One thing I did not like was the fast pace. ...

You know when I last saw Hmm. I'm thinking this could be a bit better, so that it flows better with the next line. you sitting alone – how large ...

I smell nice Yes, I do. Thanks for pointing that out. Okay, so I enjoyed this, Zeela. But I'm horrible at praise. You should read some of my reviews that ...

Here I am. As requested. Before I go any more in-depth, I would just consider separating the paragraphs with a space. Since you aren't able to indent, this would make ...