Kafkaescence

Wow. That was rushed . To answer the first request, the only reason this could be considered boring is that so much happens that there really ends up being very ...

So, there are two things I like about this. One of them is the title, and the other is (though not without occasional exceptions) your prose. Your prose was strong. ...

Hi. It is a bit cliched, but I wouldn't call it dumb. I hate judging stories harshly with such a narrow window as a prologue, because there is so much ...

Huh. Well. Flash-fic sport stories, in my experience, invariably end in the same way. I am for this reason inclined to dismiss this as hackneyed and only review it as ...

Well, that made sense! Not really. This is to help familiarize yourself with your novel, then? My tip would be to actually get started on your novel. Preliminaries like these ...

So, did the narrators change? I agree with the previous reviewer in that that is somewhat nebulous. Narrator changes aren't bad things, and they can be quite powerful in specific ...

Mmkay. This was interesting. I'm not going to go into the scientific issues with this, because they're so manifold and blaring that it's clear that you weren't really writing this ...

As requested. Firstly, I would like to offer a humble rebuttal of Lavender's first point. Verbosity in itself is not a crime. Some of the best writers are terribly verbose ...

Right. This was kind of a good story. A little. Not really. Truth is, it ended the same way it started. No one learned anything. Narrator ends up with the ...

Um. Wow. I guess it was good. I'm assuming that its purpose was allegorical, if anything. If this reflects your opinion (which I hope it doesn't), then your views on ...

Welcome to YWS! Actually, I rather enjoyed this. You're writing was crisp and easy to follow, delving into pieces of imagery here and there, but not overdoing it. It was ...

Ear! I had a dream last night where true love and true homes were nonexistent. Fairly strong first lines, but not amazing first lines. While this is a nice lead ...

Zup. I guess this wasn't too bad. Personally, I'd move it up to the chapter one position, considering that its contents are more immediately relevant to the story than they ...

I can totally sympathize with Casey's story, lol. This was okay. I mean, yeah, it was meant to be more of an inspirational story for people who get bullied than ...

Yeah. You've got the back cover of your story down smack, and that's great, I guess, but now you have to fill in the blanks. This isn't much of a ...