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Re: Story analysis! Prefer poetry, screenwrite,and short stories
Give me your piece and I will review for story, plot development, symbolism, characters, etc. But, in exchange, I will overlook grammar, spelling, and punctuation, unless I can fix it ...
Mar 8, 2011 -
Re: StainedAHeartOnMyBestShirt
Thanks ever so much :]
Mar 8, 2011 -
Re: Unfortunately; Fortunately
Fortunately, the part damaged was only from the waist up. Though blinded and profusely bleeding, on you run!
Mar 6, 2011 -
Re: How do you think the person above you looks?
Scene hair cut that is flat ironed all though naturally already pretty flat, and a dark, dark brunette. You are average height, brownish hazel eyes, you might wear contacts, but ...
Mar 6, 2011 -
Re: Rate the Signature Above You [4]
10/10 = Fact.
Mar 6, 2011 -
Re: What if...
I'd start dancing the Thriller with him, and then fall over, foaming at the mouth because I only imagined that during another one of those pesky contextual epileptic seizures I ...
Mar 6, 2011 -
Re: "Do You love?"
Write moody poetry and drink black coffee while wearing thick black lipstick on lips that never plan to kiss; I'd rather admire the stains of pucker on the rim of ...
Mar 6, 2011 -
Re: StainedAHeartOnMyBestShirt
Thanks for the review :) Yea, the title is messy, but I feel like the messiness adds to the feeling that though this poem is about love-It's not perfect love. ...
Mar 6, 2011 -
Re: StainedAHeartOnMyBestShirt
( Diner booth, red seats, coffee for me, sleep for you, I'd talk and you'd nod ) . I'd . sing . you . love . songs . . you'd ...
Mar 6, 2011 -
Re: just alone not complete
Ohm, this looks like it had originally been formatted but now is not. You may want to put those line breaks back in so it will read like a poem ...
Mar 6, 2011 -
Re: Ban the User Above You [6]
Banned for getting the avatar when I don't...
Mar 6, 2011 -
Re: Unfortunately; Fortunately
Fortunately, as a Freak of Nature, you fall under "FREAKS OF NATURE: KENYAN". Discovered by Darwin while traveling in Africa, you have the ability to run the speed of Speed. ...
Mar 6, 2011 -
Re: Corrupt a Wish 2
Wish granted, but the only control you will have is when you enter it, and it will raise 20 degrees, because you are just that hot. Aww yeaaa. I wish ...
Mar 6, 2011 -
Re: Internet Telephone
Friends telephone good whilst pizza.
Mar 6, 2011 -
Re: Long Lost Feeling
"in a long long while," Comma between long and long. Use commas to show you are listing something. I get the feeling of those memories Indescribable it is, "I get ...
Mar 6, 2011
