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thanks for the help, ill try to remember to make it better when I get some rest. I haven't slept well in months, I been waking up at every hour ...

I stare at the screen..... and they whisper my name, they stab at my soul, they want to play games. A mind game, but my mind they hold, they know ...

i dont get it......i think you should explain/expand more on your subject, give it depth and meaning.(if you didn't alredi try that lol) Throw some imagery in there. Those were ...

i know it would probably be better if i don't comment because i'm not much help....but this poem didn't strike any emotion for me. that's just my opinion though. but ...

great imagery i like your choice of words it flowed well i didnt notice any grammar mistakes so i guess your good.

hey im new here too chek out my entries PLEASE

"Memories" I remember it like yesterday... All morning on the road, leading up to our last goodbye. We rode on the bus, and as we awaited the sunrise, I looked ...

wow.........that was AWESOME!!!! but i was a bit confused here And bringing out products that on close inspection. it jus didn't fit to me. but i think you did great ...

i think it needed more of a rhythm towards the middle, but other than that was enjoyable.

it was really good, i loved it! keep writing oh nd there were a few errors that i caught,here.... through your mind like and aimless bird ( and should be ...