KJ

Since the other two have basically covered everything, I'm just going to skip over the preliminaries and give you my overall opinion: It was a good beginning. I thought it ...

Loved the ending. Only found two things wrong with this piece: Adam is there in my dreams, in my thoughts, in every wakening moment. Waking , not wakening The other ...

Hey Ash. I found nothing wrong, really. While I don't think this is your best piece, it isn't your worst. I'm sad that Adam turned out to be such a ...

Hey Sar. Okay, so while I'm disappointed to have missed all the events that happened between the part I left off and now, I enjoyed this. I felt bad for ...

Me again. It didn't take me long to read this addition; it's pretty short. Don't take that the wrong way - it's a good thing. I don't really like reading ...

Hey Ash - I loved this chapter. I think it might be your best yet. The writing is great, the dialogue is realistic, and your character development is fabulous. I ...

I think accent are fine when someone is speaking, but in the actual narrative I find it annoying, yes. It distracts me form the story. You have many punctuation erros ...

A solid beginning, I think. I enjoyed it. While there wasn't any immediate action - which would have been a nice addition - you pulled off giving us info well. ...

While I liked it, there wasn't really anything to grab my attention and keep it. I was curious as to why they were all staring at her, but since you ...

I liked the humor of it all, first off. However, this would have been more enjoyable if you'd punctuated it correctly, not to mention formatted it right. I don't view ...

Hey Ash. This part was great; I really enjoyed it. You got some good character development in there for the MC. I liked the atmosphere you created. But the whole ...

Angel of Death - I felt like I owed you for all the reviews you've given me. Granted, I haven't read the first four parts of this, but I still ...

I only have one major problem with this, otherwise I loved it. The problem is this: setting. You say that there is no specific time, it's a fairy tale? But ...

The dragon was very abrupt... I didn't really like the dialogue between Emma and the man. It's too modern-day. Now I realize that these people have knowledge of our world, ...

Another good addition. However - yes, there is ALWAYS a however - there were three problems. One, the punctuation. Yes, there is ALWAYS punctuation problems :). You forget quotation marks ...