Justlittleoleme2

Hi, I believe at that point it is Luis speaking. Amber asked why the gryphon was unconscious, and Luis was explaining that he thought it must have been hanging upside ...

Oh! and thank you for the review!

That's actually a pretty good question! One that if I gave the answer to, might actually give away some of the plot for the next chapter. o.v The short sweet ...

Thank you for the review! I'm glad you enjoyed it. ^-^

Thank you so much! ^-^ I love reading your reviews. You're so thorough with grammar, and very thoughtful with your comments. I'll be honest, I was this close )( to ...

Thank you very much for the review, and all of the advice. I didn't realize how jarring the switch between Amber's perspective and Luis's was, so I cut out the ...

Much Better! ^-^ and such a cool location!

Thank you for your review! I really appreciate all the points you made. I think I fixed most of the issues you pointed out, and even edited the dialogue a ...

Thank you for your review! I will certainly try to work on establishing the setting a little better. I know I kinda just threw you in there. Sorry ^-^ I ...

Would it help if I said the speaker isn't a dog, but a person? and that the collar is a metaphor for societal expectations?

They can be tricky for sure! But I think I finally got it, and thanks to you and steggy I think I was able to make what I was saying ...

Hey, thank you so much for the review! It helped a lot!

Thank you! I'm glad the imagery came across. ^-^ And yes, I'm going to need to change the title, I just haven't decided what it should be yet.

Ah ... now I feel kinda clumsy. Well... that's what I get for reviewing a chapter right in the middle of a book. Heh.

I edited my first review a bit. I see what you mean now, especially since the rest of your chapter seems fairly balanced as far as showing and telling goes. ...