Juniper

Roooosey! You know, I don't really do long reviews unless I really, really like something. But then, lots of times I can't find anything to say. :P Slow rhythm, never ...

Hi Hailey! June here! I think this is a decent, short piece, but to be honest, I think it's kind of lacking a strong pull of emotion, or a strong ...

Hi, Galadriel! I'm June. :) This is a beautiful short store, Gal. I really like the way you begin with smaller details and build up to the larger picture. The ...

Hey dogs, I agree with the reviewers above me; this could be a creative start, but it needs work. I would strongly suggest adding to this. ;) In the first ...

Remember that publishers consider these sort of sites OK when in the process of writing; it's basically just peer review and feedback, and doesn't technically go down as publishing when ...

Hi Paper Moon! No, no, no, you're not forgotten at all. :P In fact, I was wondering whatever happened to you just the other day. So, it seems like this ...

Hey, e.gill! June here! Just want to let you know that YWS does have a lyrics section. ;) It's a bit not easy to spy, but if you hit the ...

Hey Matt! Honestly, Darko is right. ;) This belongs in Lyrics, not Lyric poetry. :) I can't really put much of a critique on this, because it's a song. I ...

Hey Mandey! June here! As I read through this poem, the first thing I noticed was that your poem is pulling by rhyme, and not meaning. I often say that ...

Paaaalantalid! The beginning of this was off to a wonderful start. The rhyme was nicely paced; didn't stick out too much, so it was barely noticeable (which is good!). However, ...

Hey Silented! I liked this poem! It was rather peaceful, flowed nice and evenly -- overall a nice poem! I don't like how you end each line with an ellipsis ...

Hi Flower! So, one of the main things about this poem that slightly throws it off is the repetition of tick tock. I understand that's for stylistic effect, but seeing ...

Hey Dragon! I like this poem! My only complaint would be that the repetition of colors in the first two lines sounds a little bit heavy, as in it's slowing ...

Hey God! I haven't reviewed you in ages. :P SO! I think this is a really great piece, because it feels like your poured your heart and thoughts into this, ...

Jester! June here! Haha, this is gold. I love, love, love how you created the tone at the beginning; I was honestly expecting it to be something more like a ...