Juniper

Hello there! Ego said it; in this poem, you risk turning your poem into a cliche by using cliches. It's not a crime to use cliches, but the only harm ...

Makar, This wasn't bad. As I read through this (bearing in mind that I read this a few times and let it sit before I chose to critique it), I ...

Hello there! :) Interesting rhyme scheme you have here. I can't tell if the usage of slants and imperfects was intended here, dear, but read this over -- the scheme ...

Hey there, As Ego mentioned, the idea behind this isn't particularly original, and in it being such a common theme, it gets a bit boring. The suicidal love theme of ...

Ergo Sum Novus, I found this poem enjoyable in its simplicity. For it being placed in Lyric Poetry, I felt that a bit of the narrative could be trimmed out ...

Samasaurus, I loved this. It's not often that I come across a piece of poetry, especially guided ones, and find that I can enjoy it. You wrote this excellently, and ...

Hey there, Ollie! [Bear with me, it's terribly late and I'm deprived of sleep :P] This is start with potential! To begin, you see the artistic foot you started us ...

Hey there; June here, Do pay attention to what Sunny was kind enough to point out -- punctuation plays a rather important role in poetry, especially in poems such as ...

Lily, Not bad -- I do tend to enjoy poetry more when it has trifold meanings to it, but nonetheless, this is fair. Good use of onomatopoeia, though I'm not ...

Hey Jynx, This is a pretty fair beginning. I like the fact that you have a consistent rhyme scheme that you were able to maintain until the end. I often ...

Jentura! I'm pleasantly impressed! These are really good. I can't offer you much help on these at all. My favorite is the colored in one -- it's pretty and dramatic. ...

Classeh -- I'll do a better critique on this when I have my computer back, haha. I need to draw lines on this and such to better instruct what I'm ...

You expected someone to guess, Mademoiselle? ... I'm still unsure what I should say to that. :P My favorite of these is the second of the statue -- it looks ...

Irish! I actually like this one more! Despite the fact that we still don't have a designated focus, this is easier to look at because the ones at the top ...

Hey there! As Classy and Juliet pretty much both said without actually saying it, there's not much meat or fat to eat off of here. To me, this sounded more ...