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Re: Post Your Pic Here [6]
I haz snow too! It started melting, so in the more open parts we're down to a foot and a half.
Dec 22, 2009 -
Re: 100 Reviews in 15 days!
I am done. ... I should send out disclaimers to everyone I might have mentally scarred or something. The past two nights have not been my nights; yesterday was a ...
Dec 19, 2009 -
Re: impression #2: les pĂȘches (peaches)
Excellent, Kylan. This is better, much better than your other impression poem. I should clarify, though, that it's not half as horrid as my critique made it out to seem ...
Dec 19, 2009 -
Re: Forever
Hey there! June here. :) I turn over as I hear a loud ring, coming from our telephone. I look to my left to see the time on my alarm ...
Dec 19, 2009 -
Re: Dragonfly
Hey there, This is a pretty poem -- I like the description of dragonflies here. It's very elegant and you sustain that touch throughout the poem which is a good, ...
Dec 19, 2009 -
Re: Winter
Hey there, Cletus, I didn't catch much of a poem from this, so it's moved to Non fiction for now. It's not bad, but I can't see where you're going ...
Dec 19, 2009 -
Re: A Mess of a Dreamer
Hey Janay! Nicely done. I'm not one for critiquing songs much, but I can say that it's a fair job compared to a lot of other things that go mainstream. ...
Dec 19, 2009 -
Re: Quote by Mwa!
Hey there, It's cliche -- I feel like I've heard it before, but cliche's not always bad, depending on what you're using it for. I think for it to really ...
Dec 19, 2009 -
Re: Breaking The Mould.
Hey there! I have to concur Man again -- the capitalization was a bit over the top and can easily be done without, as it would make this easier to ...
Dec 19, 2009 -
Re: Catching His Eye
Hey Passion! As Man said, the words you used are a bit cliche. Poetry isn't just about getting out what you are urging to write, or what you feel -- ...
Dec 19, 2009 -
Re: Housefly
Hey theeeere, Sorry I was so long in getting to this. I pretty much forgot. :P This was good -- in poetry I find that it's not always a most ...
Dec 19, 2009 -
Re: Philophobia
Hello there! This was good, especially for a first shot. Be careful about writing about love; a lot of times, it can easily be mistaken as overrated or cliche, because ...
Dec 19, 2009 -
Re: A Change
Hello there! Not a bad start to a poem -- I would recommend differentiating prose from poetry by using a different voice for poetry. Here, if you kill the enjambment, ...
Dec 19, 2009 -
Re: Tomorrow is You
Hey Olya! For some reason I cannot understand, this poem reminds me of the famous Who Has Seen The Wind poem, by whom I cannot remember their name. I don't ...
Dec 19, 2009 -
Re: I Watch from the Window
Hey there! I think that this poem carries a lot of potential, but I don't like the narrative that you carried through with. ;) It's not bad, but the character ...
Dec 19, 2009
