Juniper

Zen, Take this poem slowly. You have so much potential here; this poem is bursting with idea and if not complete originality, it has emotion and tone to it, but ...

Hey Lyndzie, June here, I think that the problem with this poem is the lack of consistency stops the way of the flow and holds it back. Look here: I ...

Awake! I truly enjoyed this. You have a wonderful rhythm, consistent meter, perfect rhyme, and while the poem may not be the most original, I think you've done an absolutely ...

Bonjour, Ahmed! June here! :) Let's have a look at this, She lay beside me, completely flat on the bed, With her memorizing body, and her silky brown hair. My ...

Speeeeeele, I enjoyed this poem! The drive of emotion throughout was pretty strong, and that's what I like to see. You drift, though. It's hard to keep track of your ...

Hey, Lydia! I'm not sure how much I like the rhyme in this; I feel that there are some things about it that could be improved, because some lines feel ...

Hallo, Leza! Kyllo did quite a wonderful review there, and I would just say I concur and walk away, buuuut... Good work. I like the ideas you introduce, and in ...

Hey, Flooooower, Okay, let's see! This is decent, but it's just that. I feel like you have bones here with excess fat and not enough muscle; you need to trim ...

Hey, Bailey! Long time, no see. :) This is cute; I like the description of love, but why make it so outward? If you had used first person and said ...

Hallo, Spike! Nicely done! I quite like the basis on idea that you've built in this; it's rather creative, although some parts do stand some room for improvement. Let's see: ...

Hey there, Britt! Welcome to YWS! This isn't so bad, but I think you should elaborate a little more, probably give us a bit more on setting and why she ...

1337ftw. We're only about halfway through January. I don't see why we can't make it to 6000 if we crack whips and threaten to relieve people of their foodstuffs.

Jonnie-yoz, Juneth here, The butterfly doesn't transform -- only our perception. Word this better! This sounds really boring, and I even would've preferred this is if you said "The butterfly ...

Heeeey, Eddie! 1100th review, as promised. :) Let's see, I like this, for plenty of reasons, namely because it comes off stronger than your others, carries on strongly and has ...

Hi, Dradian! June here :) I quite like this! Some parts of it were really pretty, such as the second stanza. I love creative images like that; they make me ...