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Re: The Best Way to Improve Your Poetry
The first time I told somebody that, they stared at me like I was weird. And then they hit me. Yes, hit . Then the smothered me in hugs and ...
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Re: Vampiric Transformations
Hey there! I'm June and I'm going to review this for you. Welcome to YWS, Raymond. We have a 2:1 policy here which means that for every one piece of ...
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Re: The Marble Statue
Hey there! June here!! Okay, before we begin, I have a slight issue with your punctuation. It should follow at the end of the lines like this: , ; , ...
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Re: A new year's tale part 1
Hey Foxfire! June here! Your concept here is good; however there are a few issues with the way it's written. I'm not going to touch on all of them; I'll ...
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Re: The Music of Dusk
Fabulous! Hey there, June here. It's been a good long time since I have seen anything like this. You did great. This is great; However, this is more lyric poetry ...
Dec 31, 2008 -
Re: One Night
Heyyyy there Moonlight! June here! June is vicious, just so you know. Please don't take her bluntness too personal, she just goes a bit overboard sometimes without noticing; so don't ...
Dec 31, 2008 -
Re: I should have, I should have
Hey there again Shina! Vicious June here again! To tear this apart. Okay! So, remember what I said before about repetition? Repetition is icky. It's gross. Just yuck. To speak, ...
Dec 31, 2008 -
Re: The Damage of Reality
Hey Symph! June here again to tear up another piece of work. I'm vicious. You've got a great rhythm going here; I love it. I can totally see this recited ...
Dec 31, 2008 -
Re: Post Your Pic Here [6]
Aww! Bear! *snugs* Dudess... we so cannot see M in that picture. Too, too small xD
Dec 30, 2008 -
Re: The User Below You...
maybe. maybe not. TPBM doesn't like santa claus xD
Dec 30, 2008 -
Re: My 1,000th Post!
WHOA! Congratulations! That's amazing! Great job!
Dec 30, 2008 -
Re: The User Below You...
I love animals. TPBM has a phobia of spiders
Dec 30, 2008 -
Re: That kid
Hey TN! This is great! There are things here that anyone could choose to nitpick. I find that unnecessary; it's written in essay form, and that's what makes it a ...
Dec 30, 2008 -
Re: Themed Chat Night (30/12/2008 10:00pm GMT)
You have to specify what time I got killed. I was killed eighteen times in that hen party. I was even killed after I died. xD
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Re: Life as we know it - Prologue
Hey there W1ldf1r3! June here! Such an exciting story you have going on here. I love it! I'm intrigued and I can't wait to read more! A few nitpicks: “No, ...
Dec 30, 2008
