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Re: Not My Daughter
I really liked it! It made tear up a little bit towards the end. You kept the rhyming consistent, as far as I know. But, overall it was a very ...
Aug 23, 2011 -
Re: Their Journey
That's so cool. But, we have an ant problem at my house, so if it were me. I would've killed those ants instead of taking pictures of them. But, they ...
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Re: Shade- The First Immortal - chapter one
I really liked the description, and how the story flowed in such a beautiful way. One little nit pick Another rocket is on is way It should be, "Another rocket ...
Aug 23, 2011 -
Re: Things I'm Afraid Of
I really enjoyed reading this poem. It kind of gave me the creeps, which is a good thing. You really locked the reader in, and made them fill your characters ...
Aug 23, 2011 -
Re: The Mortal Door Ch 1 (revised)
Okay, I know the first chapter kind of sucked, but I really wanted to post the next chapter because I love to know what people think about it. Preface: One ...
Aug 23, 2011 -
Re: He Fell
Wow, that was really good. I couldn't stop reading watch for that last line you forgot a quotation mark, but that's the only grammar problem I saw. I really enjoyed ...
Aug 12, 2011 -
Re: My Best Friend
This was really good. I got the message and it reminded me of me and my best friend. Now, it didn't flow the way I thought it would, it could ...
Aug 12, 2011 -
Re: Dear Period
Two words: AMEN SISTER!!! I know how you feel, and this piece couldn't be anymore truthful. Some might think it's gross, but that's just how women work. You showed perfect ...
Aug 12, 2011 -
Re: Do your characters talk to you?
Well, it's not that they talk to me. It's more like I talk to them. Sorta, in my head I imagine I'm in the same situation they're in. And I ...
Aug 12, 2011 -
Re: Five years to go.
It was very good. It showed a lot of emotion through out. Now there were some parts that you were phasing (music term: meaning that it's not in sinc and ...
Aug 12, 2011 -
Re: Tonight, In My Dreams
It was good. I couldn't stop reading, it was very short and simple, which to me is a good thing. So, overall great story! keep on writing!
Aug 11, 2011 -
Re: the star who couldnt twinkle
I loved it!! I don't know why but it reminded me of the little book called rainbow fish. He had all these pretty shiny rainbow scales and no one else ...
Aug 11, 2011 -
Re: Animus
Okay, when I was in seventh grade I entered this poem contest (that I didn't win), and when I read the winner's poem. I was inspired to write this piece. ...
Aug 11, 2011 -
Re: true love
Oh my gosh! I loved it! There were a couple of typos in there that you might need to look over. But, good diction, strong voice throughout the piece. Overall ...
Aug 11, 2011 -
Re: Hello
Don't we all get easily side tracked! Welcome to this site man! You're gonna love it here I just know it!! :D
Aug 11, 2011
