Jubberr

Like the guy said above, the imagery is gorgeous, however some might say less is more... If you know what I'm saying. It's really great though, would love to read ...

This is bloody good. Needs to be read with speed though, or audience will loose interest as it's pretty long. But seriously, nice work, wish i could write like this!

Thanks guys, I totally agree, I just never tried poetry before and i thought I would give it a go and see what people thought. (:

Blue; ocean, endless like the sky that is your back-drop, Your eyes glint with the happiness of faraway places, ice-cream, sun. There are adults behind you, casually holding their drinks, ...