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  • Poetry » Realistic, General
    Re: The War of Innocence

    Tigerlilly, This is amazing. This is awful. I don't know how to respond. You took infanticide, abortion, and dressed it in beautiful words. You took a problem in society that ...

    Feb 1, 2016

  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, Humor
    Re: Ascent Chapter 6

    Hey Storygirl! I really liked this piece. It was honest, realistic, and funny. I loved how playful Brendon was. It does a lot to establish his personality. Jenna, Taylor, and ...

    Dec 30, 2015


  • Hey Felistia! I love the scenes you've displayed here. Your imagery is on point. :) I especially like the description "Forests carpet the banks, their green leaves trailing in the ...

    Nov 28, 2015

  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, Action / Adventure
    Re: BIRTHMARKED - Chapter One

    YAY!! I love this one too! I like the history of their world, very creative. ;) And again, as with the last chapter, the imagery is very vivid and creative. ...

    Nov 24, 2015

  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, Action / Adventure
    Re: BIRTHMARKED - Synopsis and Chapter One (incomplete)

    Hey there C! Welcome to YWS. I hope you love it here. Let me just say . . . this beginning really grabbed me. It's a very striking idea. I ...

    Nov 23, 2015

  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, Supernatural
    Re: My Crush

    Hi Kratos! Welcome to YWS! I hope you love it here as much as I do. I'm going to review this piece of yours and give you a few pointers ...

    Nov 10, 2015

  • Poetry » General, General
    Re: The day

    Hey Jared, This is a wonderful piece, jam-packed with imagery and graceful diction. The rhyme scheme is free-feeling and doesn't feel forced at all, a very hard level to achieve. ...

    Jul 18, 2015

  • Poetry » Science, Romantic
    Re: O' Rapunzel, Where Art Thou?

    Hey there! I didn't get all of this because my science skills are still dim, but I did manage to recognize some of the references and they cracked me up. ...

    Jul 18, 2015

  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General
    Re: The Deep Sky

    Hey Isabel, Welcome to YWS! This was an exciting piece, full of imagery and suspense. I could see the story clearly in my mind and could follow it easily, but ...

    Jun 5, 2015

  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, Supernatural
    Re: Instinct - Chapter 2

    Hi Skies! Chapter 2!!!! This story is really building up tension. Lettie's sick, Juno's been taken hostage, and the Canids somehow have way more food than they should have. Awesome! ...

    Jun 5, 2015

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure
    Re: Parallel Needs: Prologue

    Hey Bee! Welcome to YWS!!!! This sounds like it will be a really fun, adventurous read. I don't have much of a story to go off of yet, since this ...

    Jun 4, 2015

  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, Supernatural
    Re: Instinct - Chapter 1

    Hey Skies, I really loved the imagination in this piece. You aren't recycling overused ideas here; this is a completely new concept to me. Kudos to you! I think its ...

    Jun 4, 2015

  • Other » General, General
    Re: Presidential Campaign Speech

    Hey CJ! Welcome to YWS. I don't know very much about politics, but I'm here to give you a few pointers. This was an extremely good speech. I would definitely ...

    May 16, 2015

  • Short Story » Literature, Realistic
    Re: A Paper bag and a Sign...

    I really liked this. Honestly, whenever I walk by a mirror my reflection scares me. Not because I'm a scary-looking person or anything, but because it's just not me. I ...

    May 10, 2015

  • Poetry » General, General
    Re: Release I

    Hey Arathorth, This is absolutely beautiful. It's amazing that you can find so much symbolism and beauty in something so simple. I especially liked that you withheld what you were ...

    May 8, 2015


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