JorgeTheAuthor

I like the whole structure of the poem. It speaks deep about the way a drug addict feels. I recommend including more of the daughter. Maybe if we saw why ...

I must admit that I too fell for the title. I was prepared to read a harry potter piece. I really like how deeply you have to think about this ...

I love your ability to use the scene both mentally and physically. Mentally you have made people know exactly what the person is thinking. I have not seen the hunger ...

I really felt the raw emotion that steamed off the poem. I suggest just cleaning up with some technique but keep the emotion. It is a beautiful piece that really ...