Jongosi

I enjoyed that. I’ve never really been good at figuring out metaphors and themes and such, but here goes: First, I’m not sure about the choice of second person narrative. ...

That was great! I love the feeling you put into the story, the words are all so precise that it gets the emotion across brilliantly. The main character’s voice is ...

Nice start! Your writing was good, a bit long-winded at times but I like your style. I found the story really got interesting when you introduced the mysterious woman. I'm ...

That was good. I like where you’re going with this. If this is part of a larger piece it’s spot on but if it’s a full story I urge you ...