Jon

Even beautiful things are dangerous, darling, don't go touching them. Yes, that too is a beautiful sight– but look at us, darling, look at us, and pay no mind to ...

I've been reading a lot of Dickinson lately. :D ~~~~~~~~~~~ As I lay here in my night, a witchcraft comes to steal my sight and by the bones of Tramps– ...

My heart was once filled with bitterness But you changed me from that first smile This was the only part I had a problem with -- it sounds too cliched, ...

I don't have much to say here, because I loved this poem! Now, usually in my critiques I spend a long time -- cause' I don't find loads of poems ...

Tears of blood I understand you're going for a symbolic 'Jesus-like' crying of blood. However, it's a bit clichéd in writing. Also, you start out with it -- making it ...

Hi, Bailey! :D (I first called you Hailey, I'm sorry!) :oops: I hear the music. In the wind and rain. You make too sharp of a stop in your poem ...

Thanks, guys! I'm going to try and tweak it a little without changing the idea, as you seem to like it. Thanks, Jon :D

Hello, FQ! First off, I thought this poem had a *nice* fragile nature to it. Howevere, there were some spots that were cliché. Maybe it was when, Don't need the ...

` Holy A charm was laid upon my face And ne'er more did the Apostles Run – Apostle run, Apostle run! And It was done – I was none of ...

I really like this! I thought all of the colors blended beautifully and the images were very unique! (Was this on canvas?) I paint too...I might try something like this. ...

This reminds me of the bad guy from Power-Puff Girls...Hm... But yes, this is just a doodle. :D

I want the old chat back. The new one is slow to me. Plus when having a private chat it lags a lot. So old chat back please. Okie dokie. ...

I really don't have too much to say. However, I think if you could flesh it out a bit more...it'd be better. I get that they're on a hammock...but where? ...

(I feel a good idea behind this...I just want to shape it better.) ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ My light has returned manifold since then, Brought by a thousand rays, no less! You could ...

Hello, I'm Jon! :P Let me start by saying that when you rhyme, you have to be careful. In a lot of places you seem to force your words -- ...