JolieSari55

Queen Lucinda’s eyebrows arched high as she shrieked. “This is all your fault!” “My fault?” King Rupert replied indignantly. Both King and Queen sat in the courtyard of their castle. ...

Sooo... I came upon this by chance. I was just glancing through things and found it. I wasn't really planning on commenting but, well, I couldn't help myself. I love ...

Well, I’m intrigued. What is their history? What lies have been spun? What will he do? I was defiantly caught up it…. so nice job! As for my critique, it ...

I really like your main character, however depression prone she may be. She’s got that “I hate the world attitude” which most kids in their teenage years can relate to. ...

I like anything with wolves… so, I liked it. Lol. It was good for being a “spur of the moment” sort of thing. Actually, if you wanted to make it ...

Don’t be discouraged. I read a lot of your reviews by the others and I am baffled by their lack of compassion. Your story is difficult to get into and ...

You know what this discussion reminds me of? When you’re in high school a teacher tells you how to think about a passage. I remember my teacher reading a poem ...

It had been exactly seven days, four hours, sixteen minutes, and one billion nanoseconds since she had started her diet. Penny Davis had been counting since she took up the ...

A story isn’t a story unless it’s going somewhere. While you do have some cute characters… what is going on? How’d they come to be on this date? I just ...

If was six years old and my daddy came to rescue me… I wouldn’t question it. He’s my daddy. I’m six. In that view he is the best man in ...

Wow. A lot of anger- I could feel it. You definitely tapped into the reader’s emotions. Death is a scary topic and, while you handle it well, I thought it ...

I liked it. I'm very in to the whole vampire/werewolf scene. However, I think it would be better if it was developed... What I mean is, where's the point? Yes, ...